Author's Note: this was inspired by reading the book 1984; realizing how the amount of power that the government has in 1984, is similar to the amount of power in reality.
Winston Smith, 1984
Staring blankly at the wall
In a grey, dark world
Staring blankly at the future
Standing bleak before me
Staring blankly at Big Brother
Hatred boiling inside me
Staring blankly at Emanuel Goldstein
Charsimatic, Deceptive, Freedom
Staring blankly at escape
Desperate longing coursing within
Staring blankly at fear
The hand controlling me
Staring blankly at the mirror
I see the captive of a government, the victim of insanity
I liked that a lot. It was cool how you started every other line with "Staring blankly..." Nice job.
ReplyDeleteNice poem Brad! You used really descriptive vocabulary and it had a good flow to it. For your first poem it's deffinately good! Who's Winston Smith?
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem and I think you should write more, the way it flowed was really nice and this makes me want to know what happened. Good job!
ReplyDeleteFor you first poem this is really good! well its good in general! This sounds very mature and i like your layout a lot. good job
ReplyDeleteWinston Smith is a character from the book 1984 and thankyou
ReplyDeleteWhy shouldnt we expect much? (or just the title?)I thought it was really good like other people said with the repitiion. The end was really strong too.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone else. It was a good poem and you used really good repetition and vocabulary!
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